I am going to make a plan to revise my essay. this plan will include me doing the following:

-First I will read my essay out loud to myself because you can hear mistakes you have made that you sometimes can’t see.  I will then read the essay out loud to a family member or someone who didn’t write it and see if they pick up on any mistakes that I have made, or sentences they may seem like they are running too long, as that is one of my biggest challenges. I tend to continuously write what comes to mind and I do not always break up my ideas so paragraphs and sentences run too long. I will also re-read Southan’s essay and re-watch the Ted Talk with Titus Kaphar and take a look at my claims and make sure that I am properly explaining their ideas when trying to back up my evidence towards the claims. I Will also look back to my Little Seagull hand book and try to find techniques that I can use to help fix parts in my essay that I do not feel too sure about. Along with the Little Seagull handbook I will also be looking back at my They Say I Say book jut to make sure that I have written my thesis and my thesis paragraph correctly. Lastly I will read through my paper and pick and choose the parts that I feel like I am unsure about and I will try to re-write them. Once this is done Ii will put the re-written work in me essay, read it out loud for a potential final time and see if I am satisfied with the outcome. Once this is completed, if I am not satisfied, I will continue to try to re-write my chosen sentences to fit my essay as best as they can to make me obtain satisfaction.